Sixteen!! The Combiners (Excerpt)
This is an excerpt from a longer narrative poem in my book, Prairie Moths. It is the final section of “The Combiners” –a poem about the itinerant workers who would drive up from Oklahoma each summer to harvest the wheat crop in South Dakota. This infusion of fresh young men was, of course, exciting to teenaged girls whose own male classmates were a bit immature. Not that any of us ever did anything about it. Imagining and talking was enough for us at the age of sixteen!
The Combiners
I saw him first on the bleachers
on the other side of the floor.
As dancers came together and parted,
I saw him and then didn’t see him.
After the music stopped, I craned my neck
around the legs that stood in front of me,
trying to see him across the cleared dance floor.
Then the voice at the top of the legs
asked me to dance, and I looked up–at him.
Feeling uncertain, wicked and wild,
I answered yes.
I’d served him once or twice
at Restaurant 16–
that highway-fronting restaurant
as exotic as its name.
I knew he was working the Weston place
with an outfit my dad had never used.
He liked his steak well-done,
French dressing, no tomatoes.
Butterscotch sundaes made him cough.
Over the water pitcher and order pad,
we had traded a look or two.
I knew he wore Old Spice
and drank Cokes with breakfast,
but I didn’t know his name.
When we got to the dance floor,
he took my hand,
put his other hand on my damp waist.
It was a slow dance and the night was hot.
The dance was work.
I was awkward–too inhibited to get as intimate
as following in dancing requires.
Over the music, we tried to shout our names,
tried to find a mutual rhythm,
finally giving up both endeavors
to dance the slow song, not touching,
moving our arms in fast song 60’s style
to the slow song rhythms.
When the music stopped,
he walked me back again
to the bleacher
he had plucked me from,
reinserted me into the correct space in the line of girls,
smiled, and walked away.
My friends closed around me
like a sensitive plant
to hear the news.
I watched his back,
blue short-sleeved shirt,
his pressed Levis
and his cowboy boots.
I watched the Oklahoma swing of his hips–
danger on the hoof.
He wouldn’t ask me to dance again,
yet, his sun-blackened arms,so finely muscled,
had held me for a minute or two.
His bleached blue eyes
had seen something of worth in me.
He had asked my name, touched my waist,
and walked me off the dance floor.
And, since this was as spicy
as any of our stories would likely be
all summer long,
I turned to my friends to tell the tale.
Judy, the picture could have been taken at my high school in the 60’s. So nostalgic!
Excellent poem.
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The picture is of me and two friends…probably our sophomore year in h.s.
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Yes our feelings very very hot at that age
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Oh! I just loved this! it was just the right dish of hometown with a little bit of wicked and wild on it! You outdid yourself, Judy!
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This was a great read. Thank You for sharing! Oh to be a teenager again…
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I don’t think I’d fare very well as a teenager in this modern world.
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Your lovely story reminds me of a dance I went to at our school when I was probably only 14 or so and one boy asked me to dance… the only one and I remember the awkwardness of the dance as well…. Diane
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Such agony. I still get a bit panicked if I think of slow dancing with a man, even though I’m a much better dancer than I was at 16. In some ways we remain 16 forever. Or at least I do.
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Posted it on my facebook parenting page. So lovely. Thank you.
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Thanks, Parent’s Friend. Such a nice surprise!
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At least you got to dance at 16, I was a late starter, 1st dance at 18, almost fainted & I’ll never forget his name. 😀
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Being a dancer I could relate to this. Those feelings stopping you from having the contact that is necessary to follow. I just loved this poem.
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This was about 1/4 or less of the entire poem.
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I’d love to read the entire poem.
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Blatant advertising. You can either buy the entire book “Prairie Moths, Memories of a Farmer’s Daughter” on Amazon print or Kindle, or I can print the entire poem on my blog. Don’t be embarrassed if you don’t want to add another book to your library. The only reason I didn’t print the entire poem was because it is loooooong. This is really an autobiography in non-rhymed verse. Somehow when I pretend it is a poem, it isn’t as overwhelming. All that blank space on the page! It’s a pretty book with pictures of my grandparent’s homestead and other prairie sights. If you’d rather I print it on my blog, happy to oblige.
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You have to advertise. I bought it on kindle and will look forward to reading it.
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Okay, Irene. Here is the complete poem, just for you! (Oh, and anyone else who cares to read it.) I, too, always want to know the rest of the story!!! https://judydykstrabrown.com/2015/08/27/the-combiners-entire-poem/
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