
Mother’s Song
Left in our wake, hushed water parts like wings,
leaving behind us this brief afternoon.
With every oar stroke, I feel our parting
hushed as the falling darkness brings
through the departing wings of birds, the moon.
In this hushed darkness, my thoughts are spinning,
for as the rest of your life has its starting,
you leave behind you its beginning.
Phew! The prompt today was a doozy. Here it is: Today your optional prompt is to write a seven-line poem called a san san, which means “three three” in Chinese (It’s also a term of art in the game Go). The san san has some things in common with the tritina, including repetition and rhyme. In particular, the san san repeats, three times, each of three terms or images. The seven lines rhyme in the pattern a-b-c-a-b-d-c-d.
http://www.napowrimo.net/day-fourteen-3/
Since this is a poem about leaving, which suitcases always suggest, I’m posting this on the WordPress Daily Post site as well:
https://dailypost.wordpress.com/prompts/suitcase/
this poem has a lovely lilting feeling, and titling it “mother’s song” seems so appropriate. i’m sure it would be a beautiful piece put to music.
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Good idea. Want to try, Miles? Are you a musician. Thanks for the comment…
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Wow. Good. And complex.
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I thought the prompt was a doozy today, too, Judy. 😉 You’ve done it great justice here, though. Wonderful.
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Thanks, Whimsy.
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